Support Tips

One of the basic things you need to do to gather support is to read the sources where you are going to use.

Then using the reading group's techniques of reread and analyze, you can find the basic flow of the story and the personalities of the characters.

 Then using your understanding of the books, you need to make the characters stay in characters and imitate the authors' flow of the story.

Whenever, you are in doubt of something about the story or the characters, go find quotes in the books relating to what you are writing.

How to find quotes: Find lines that are important in proving causes in your story.  Used page number and highlight any parts you think is important.

How to analyze: Ask yourself :What methods are used in the introduction? List key observations and find supports in the paper that accompany the observations. And how is the overall conclusions of the paper?

Examples of good support: (Short versions)

Statement:  Rosaleen is like a mother to Lily.

Quote:  "She stared at the bee and shook her head.  "If you get stung, don't come whining to me," she said, "'cause I ain't gonna care."

     That was a lie.

I was the only one who knew that despite her sharp ways, her heart was more tender than a flower skin and she loved me beyond reason."  (p. 11)

Explanation:  This statement shows that Lily knows things about Rosaleen that wasn't common knowledge to others.

Statement:  The Wailing wall helps lighten a person's load.

Quote:  "I tore a piece of paper from a tablet and wrote my mother's name on it.  Deborah Owens.

When I looked outside, I knew I would have to make my way by starlight.  I crept across the grass, back to the edge of the woods  to May's wall.  Hiccuping all the way.  Placing my hands on the stones, all I wanted was not to ache so much... I pressed the paper with her name into a cranny that seemed right for her, giving her to the wailing wall.  Somewhere along the way my hiccups disappeared."  (p. 100-101)

Explanation:  Throughout the story it seems that only May needs to use the wall to let go of her sorrows. However this quote shows that Lily needed help letting things out and the wall acted like a person everyone can trust to listen to their sorrows.

Time Table

Timetable: Monday the 28th
10 minutes
First introduce how to find good support through our example topics and support.
5 minutes
Go over how to have a good analysis part in the paper
next 10 minutes
Then ask the students to go into groups and swap papers to see where their analysis and support come from
Last 20 minutes
Have the students edit their paper on their computer and follow their peers' guide
Copy and paste the link
http://wps.ablongman.com/long_behrens_saw_1/1/337/86522.cw/index.html%20parentloc

Support Tips

One of the basic things you need to do to gather support is to read the sources where you are going to use.

Then using the reading group's techniques of reread and analyze, you can find the basic flow of the story and the personalities of the characters.

 Then using your understanding of the books, you need to make the characters stay in characters and imitate the authors' flow of the story.

Whenever, you are in doubt of something about the story or the characters, go find quotes in the books relating to what you are writing.

How to find quotes: Find lines that are important in proving causes in your story.  Used page number and highlight any parts you think is important.

How to analyze: Ask yourself :What methods are used in the introduction? List key observations and find supports in the paper that accompany the observations. And how is the overall conclusions of the paper?

Kira, If have any idea add them and put up the timetable.

Time Table Day:2

 Wednesday Time Table
For the first 10 minutes
For the first few minutes go over who won the sentence writing contest.

Then introduce Using the Five senses website to explain how the 5 senses can enhance your paper.

For the next 20 minutes
Split up into groups and analyze the paper wrote. Give each other feedback on usages of languages.
Choose a best part in their paper and explain why.

For the next 10 minutes
Assign the each group a chapter in book and have each person look for a part that is well written using description and post it on blog.


Homework: Rewrite your paper and follow the guidance and we will be collecting the papers.


Website for Viewing http://www.cmmayo.com/d5mwe.html
http://ezinearticles.com/?Using-the-Five-Senses-to-Enhance-Your-Writing&id=180036

Time Table: Day 1

Tuesday:
Introduce our Figurative Language Part (5 minutes)

Lead the class in an exercise where they orally rewrite a scene orally with a group. (7 minutes)

Recreate a scene from the book such as describing the wall using at least three of the five senses within the group. (6 minutes)

Some of the activities:

Using better descriptive imagery:  Utilizing smell, touch, taste, sound, and sight.

Choose a scene or character from the book and rewrite an event that happened using at least three of the five senses.

Pull out brain-storm ideas and focus on one element of the story.  Utilize activities from before to help write better.

Homework (10 pts): 

Write a descriptive paragraph on a small section of the scene you will use in Paper Two and expand and explain why this fits perfectly in the book.  One page Minimum, Use actions and quotes from the book to support your points.

Rubric

The Five Senses	Grammar and Spelling	Visual Influence	The Support	Total Points (10)
Skillfully Used 5 Senses.	No grammatical or spelling errors	Masterful ways of using visual influence.	Powerful usages of support and carefully crafted
Used 4 Senses	Very few grammatical errors (1-3)	Clear understanding of Visual influences	• Utilized many supports
Used 2-3 Senses	Several grammatical errors (4-7)	•Writer used some visual influences but seem detached	Utilized some support
Used 1 Sense	Didn't proofread.	• Unclear Visual Influences	Utilized little support
No Senses Used	Passage makes no sense due to grammatical errors	No Visuals at All	No support

REMEMBER!!!!

Bring Three Hard copies and turn it in on Moddlefor the Second Day: Points off if you don't.

Different Day

April and May are purely crazy,
Life of a beekeeper is exciting
Freedom for African Americans are coming but didn't happen yet

We chose a statement.

Have them decide what the support is.

Have them decide what may have been a true story.

More Tips

Here are some more basic tips you need to know before you move to the figurative part. These tips can help you build the foundation for figurative language.
1. Eliminate unnecessary words and boring parts(Would you like to listen to a 5-hour lecture? me neither, so be precise to the point)
2.Paint a picture with your writing, fill it with the five sense( a color pictures always convene more feeling and impact than a black and white picture)
3.Practice makes perfect(If you don't walk how would you run, if don't practice your writing, how would you create awesome stories and essays?)
4.Start with a single idea( What is your main point? Start from there)
5.Engage your reader(don't be shy, show the world who you are, if the readers feel more connection and feeling in your paper, your ability as a writer will improve)

Figurative Language

Figurative language can be used to help enhance your sentences so readers have a better feel of what you are trying to relay in your story.  Comparisons are a common tool used when describing one of the five senses.  When using comparisons, make sure that you don't fall into the routine of using cliches (i.e. ran like the wind, clear as glass, etc.).

An exercise to try on improving your essay.

1. Pick a few sentences from your essay with sensory details.
2. Rewrite three more sentences with varying comparisons (avoiding cliches)
3. Show three sentences to peers and pick the best sentence.

Here are some examples from an old essay.

1. The air feels warm and humid.
1. The air is like a sauna starting to warm the room.
2. The air always had a touch of summer in it.
3. Cold would be absent from here like water in a desert.

2. Trade winds lazily drift through the area keeping it cool.
1. Trade winds like cool silk drift across the expanse that is Rocky Hill.
2. The trade winds fight against the heat while we work.
3. Trade winds act like natural AC in a classroom.

3. A small terraced pond with lily pads would be the last thing you see, with its lily pads on one terrace and taro plants on the other.
1. The last thing you would see is a small terraced pond with platform-like lily pads with a patch of taro plants that have leaves like elephant ears.
2. In a terraced lily pond, lily pads float on the surface like inner tubes in a pool next to a patch of taro plants.
3. A taro plants bend gracefully over with leaves like hearts in a terraced lily pond along with lily pads. 

Here is the critique received.

1. The air feels warm and humid.
1. The air is like a sauna starting to warm the room. [<I have heard this expression before, so it is a cliché.]
2. The air always had a touch of summer in it. [<I really like this sentence.  It is elegant and original.]
3. Cold would be absent from here like water in a desert.

2. Trade winds lazily drift through the area keeping it cool.
1. Trade winds like cool silk drift across the expanse that is Rocky Hill. [I would delete the underlined part, but otherwise it is fantastic.  That simile is unique, and it gives a good, tangible image of the winds.  Good!]
2. The trade winds fight against the heat while we work.
3. Trade winds act like natural AC in a classroom.

3. A small terraced pond with lily pads would be the last thing you see, with its lily pads on one terrace and taro plants on the other.
1. The last thing you would see is a small terraced pond with platform-like lily pads with a patch of taro plants that have leaves like elephant ears.
2. In a terraced lily pond, lily pads float on the surface like inner tubes in a pool next to a patch of taro plants. [<I like the active verb “float,” and the simile instantly gave me an image.  Good job!]
3. A taro plants bend gracefully over with leaves like hearts in a terraced lily pond along with lily pads. [I like the personification and active verb “bend.”  (Noun-verb agreement needs to be worked out.)]